Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

The question is : Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

I\’d like this to be put into a personal statement paragraph :

I took a year off of university in order to gain work experience. I traveled to Erbil, Iraq and began working at my father\’s company. at first i was very intimidated since I\’d never done something like this before and ive never worked anywhere, and the thought of working at a company dominated by men was very intimidating to me. I built up the courage however and I\’m proud that I did that because I lived the best year of my life. I felt like in that one year, a new world was open to me that I\’d never known existed (business). My dad basically threw me in between the engineers and employees and told me to get my way around without his help or guide. I spent my first months shadowing different sectors of the company since it deals with marketing, advertising, leasing, construction… Im proud that i had the courage to do something like that even though I thought I would fail to accomplish anything at all. I ended up working my way up to even becoming construction manager at one point, dealing with worker productivity, project accounting, material supply…and I even organized the opening of the first women\’s market in Erbil, having to deal with several media companies, entertainers, and organizing competitions and activities.

what makes me proud : I\’m proud that i was courageous and outgoing. I\’m proud that I took the initiative to never give up even at times when I thought I was going to fail. I\’m proud that I didnt back down beacuse the thoughts of \”I\’m too young to do anything, and everyone there is older than me why would they even listen to anything I say?\” I\’m proud because I worked my way up to the top and proved to myself that I could be up for any challenge… Please come up with more things to be proud about

How does it relate to the person you are : I fee like I found myself in that year, and discovered aspects of myself that I didnt even know existed. I know that I will be up for any challenges life throws at me, and I would work my way to overcome them without giving up no matter how many times i fail. The experience made me more outgoing, more willing to open up and share my ideas and opinions.It was from this expereince that i knew I wanted to do this my whole life so thats why im going into business management ..Come up with more things please

The paragraph needs to be very very very well written and structured. I need all aspects of the question to be answered coherently. High level of english please and no grammatical errors 🙂